I think you need to look at marias wrist when the mc is first in the house and gets hit for the second time (she must have broken it punching the mc i guess).
The MC looks like a 12 year old brat both physically and mentally, (he looks more like a girl or rather he's a trans character from another VN, I think it's called My New Second Chance), and he needs to grow a backbone, because he lets himself be bossed around, intimidated and hit by students, girls younger than him (he's supposed to be the teacher), who in his right mind goes to a university in shorts, a shirt and a vest being a professor there, if the story continues like this it will be Queens of Harem, that is, a femdom and lesbian/bi festival that have a live human dildo, which they will use when they get tired of eating carpets and want cocks, I hope it changes in some way, because the renders look good, (although I could mention which VNs are just inspired/copied) or at least the attitude and that he used that pair of balls not only to fuck, when the girls after so much begging allow it, but to give himself his place and honor the title of the VN King of Harem. Psdt: too many bad endings, waste of time and space for code and dialogue
The update logs show that the game has gotten to version 2.2, but my game is still on 0.1, and says that the game is up to date. Is the more udated game something specifically for like a patreon service or something, or is it a separate issue?
I have randomly gotten a notif that you followed me, you interest me with the visual novels that i see before me, King of Harem and Money and Power, but if you didn't I wouldn't have ever found these two interesting novels that I will check out soon enough!
I will also give my thoughts on it once I do check it too!
Achmad, I like the art in this game! But I think the writing/structure needs a lot of help. Your story should feel interactive, but in this case all the branches just lead to instanta death - there's no real choices for the player. Your characters also have a very samey feel. I think you would really benefit from finding a collaborator who can focus on the writing. Just my suggestion - any game is obviously a labor of love and it's clear you're working hard!
Thank you for the feedback! I’m aware of the issues with the writing and structure, as I'm still new to this. But I’ll definitely work on improving the interactivity in the next update. Thanks for your comment—I'll make sure to fix this!
I've updated the game based on your suggestions, making it more interactive. I would love to hear your thoughts on the improvements. Thank you so much!
The game has a lot of potential and I'm excited to see where the creator takes it. One thing that could make even the intro much better is to fix up the various typos, it will make the game seem a lot more neat and well put together.
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I think you need to look at marias wrist when the mc is first in the house and gets hit for the second time (she must have broken it punching the mc i guess).
The MC looks like a 12 year old brat both physically and mentally, (he looks more like a girl or rather he's a trans character from another VN, I think it's called My New Second Chance), and he needs to grow a backbone, because he lets himself be bossed around, intimidated and hit by students, girls younger than him (he's supposed to be the teacher), who in his right mind goes to a university in shorts, a shirt and a vest being a professor there, if the story continues like this it will be Queens of Harem, that is, a femdom and lesbian/bi festival that have a live human dildo, which they will use when they get tired of eating carpets and want cocks, I hope it changes in some way, because the renders look good, (although I could mention which VNs are just inspired/copied) or at least the attitude and that he used that pair of balls not only to fuck, when the girls after so much begging allow it, but to give himself his place and honor the title of the VN King of Harem. Psdt: too many bad endings, waste of time and space for code and dialogue
The update logs show that the game has gotten to version 2.2, but my game is still on 0.1, and says that the game is up to date. Is the more udated game something specifically for like a patreon service or something, or is it a separate issue?
I have randomly gotten a notif that you followed me, you interest me with the visual novels that i see before me, King of Harem and Money and Power, but if you didn't I wouldn't have ever found these two interesting novels that I will check out soon enough!
I will also give my thoughts on it once I do check it too!
Achmad, I like the art in this game! But I think the writing/structure needs a lot of help. Your story should feel interactive, but in this case all the branches just lead to instanta death - there's no real choices for the player. Your characters also have a very samey feel. I think you would really benefit from finding a collaborator who can focus on the writing. Just my suggestion - any game is obviously a labor of love and it's clear you're working hard!
Thank you for the feedback! I’m aware of the issues with the writing and structure, as I'm still new to this. But I’ll definitely work on improving the interactivity in the next update. Thanks for your comment—I'll make sure to fix this!
I've updated the game based on your suggestions, making it more interactive. I would love to hear your thoughts on the improvements. Thank you so much!
有些缺陷的是，内容较短，游玩一小段时间就结束了
if the game is show game over, i think u pick the wrong choice . there still more cntent
那我多试试，希望你们能精益求精做的更好
Next update, I will make it easier, I highlight the right choice. Thank you for the comment btw
冒昧问一下，在之后几次更新里是否能为游戏加上中文翻译呢
I will consider about it. If china player is so much,I will add china language next update
The game has a lot of potential and I'm excited to see where the creator takes it. One thing that could make even the intro much better is to fix up the various typos, it will make the game seem a lot more neat and well put together.
thank you so much for your kind words... yeah it seems it a lots of typo. I try to fix that,thank you
look promising
thank you so much for the great compliment ...
Good game, I see new potential